According to some individuals, only parents should take care of the physical activity of their children and schools should not play a role in it. However, this statement seems to be unjustifiable to me. Because, Activities in school are more interesting compared with ones at home, moreover, a school can cause to prove children's inner skills.
From one angle, children get easily bored when they play alone or in a small group. The reason is that physical games are run interestingly in an extended group. If children do not find partners to play with, they may abandon physical activities, is not any more attractive for them, and try to spend their time in other entertainments such as computer games, which do not require partners, causing children less active. However, in the school, they can have lots of counter partners, and this encourages them to make enthusiasm towards physical activities.
From another perspective, primary school is considered a fundamental facility for all specialties, so it should have all basic subjects such as even physical training. Because in early age nobody knows who children become in the future. Therefore, they should experiment with themselves in different fields. As an outcome, if they have a talent for any kind of sports games, their supervisor may notify their parents about it, this may lead parents to support their children to be professional in this sport game.
To sum up, some consider that sport activity should be abandoned from school, and give this responsibility to parents. Nevertheless, since children have access to play in a group and be encouraged by this aspect, and the school can bring up plenty of sportsmen, the school ought to have sport lessons as part of the curriculum.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'proving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: proving
...s at home, moreover, a school can cause to prove childrens inner skills. From one angl...
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Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ubjects such as even physical training. Because in early age nobody knows who children ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08333333333 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81680911321 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579861111111 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6222174985 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.615384615 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368991665234 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12486124864 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0913652200574 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243795458728 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0918037041696 0.056905535591 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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