Nowadays, the constant population growth has become the biggest problems for human beings. I do not agree that a steady rise in the earth's population is the topmost issue for the humanity. Indeed, climate change needs to be accepted as the massive obstacle. This essay will support my opinion with relevant examples.
Firstly, decline in the death rates can be one of the significant fundamental reasons. Owing to the advancements and new inventions in medicine, previously fatal and dreadful diseases have found the successful treatments. In absence of remarkable discoveries, the majority of patients would have died untimely. Secondly, lack of education forms a solid basis for the rise in the globe’s population. Take the example of developing countries where most citizens are illiterate, live below the poverty level and have little or no knowledge about the family planning. Furthermore, the majority of cases consider the surge in population as an increase in the Human Resources as in the number of productive hands, an negative trait, responsible for the flare up of population.
However, I firmly consider climate change as the biggest global challenge nowadays. Since many developed nations have low birth rates due to the high level of education, the population expansion does not occur on a global scale. And the escalation may be readily controlled by adopting safe contraception methods. By contrast, climate change can become irreversible past a threshold, which means that the impact of climate change will become unmanageable, subjecting to the worst disaster. Moreover, overpopulation, water scarcity and conflicts, which also pose dire menaces to human beings, are in fact because of the climate change. For illustration, when severe floods and droughts hit a specific community, there is a high probability that the people will be necessitated to either migrate out of the area or clash for the foods, bringing about overpopulation and potential deaths respectively.
In conclusion, considering the irrevocability and the indirect source of population inflation, presumably, climate change must be perceived as the greatest threat to us over the population growth.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
if we agree that ' over population is not the greatest problem faced by humanity' , then need to give two reasons to support it. but it doesn't mean we need to prove: 'climate change as the biggest global challenge nowadays'.
we just need contents like:
1. Since many developed nations have low birth rates due to the high level of education, the population expansion does not occur on a global scale. And the escalation may be readily controlled by adopting safe contraception methods.
2. technical improvement can help solve the issues brought by over population...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 339 350
No. of Characters: 1804 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.291 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.322 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.925 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.941 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.721 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.483 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'earths'' or 'earth's'?
Suggestion: earths'; earth's
... do not agree that a steady rise in the earths population is the topmost issue for the...
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Line 3, column 714, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...s as in the number of productive hands, an negative trait, responsible for the fla...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49262536873 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08681169988 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616519174041 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5777456645 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.529411765 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9411764706 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119933076724 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374629293282 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502988351196 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0856639859046 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619593738321 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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