Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
In recent years, the question of whether extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing should be prohibited or not has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Although these kinds of sports appear hazardous, their benefits are far more significant.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why the idea of banning extreme sports is supported. First, since the weather is unpredictable, extreme sports put high risks of injuries and death on participants. For instance, parachutists could be in danger such as losing navigation or falling if a fierce wind appeared suddenly, which implies that the introduction of prohibition laws is imperative to keep people safe. Second, participants would invest a huge of money in related devices and equipment to pursue their preferences in extreme sports. In fact, people need to devote their time, energy, and money to purchase necessities for extreme sports to guarantee safety when performing, which proves that those kinds of sports are a waste of time and money.
On the other hand, I would argue that it is not necessary to prohibit extreme sports as they bring advantages not only to participants but also to the government. First, since taking part in sports or extreme sports, in particular, is people's preferences, nobody can have the right to ban them. This means that if participants ensure that they have a grasp of skills or knowledge which could protect themselves, they can pursue their personal preferences, which shows the freedom of each person in a country. In addition, those kinds of sports could enrich the national budget due to their popularity like in the present. In fact, in order to prove the power, the majority of the wealthy tend to favor extreme sports over other ubiquitous and monotonous sports, which implies that extreme sports could be a contributing factor to the economic development.
In conclusion, although demerits of risky sports are recognized, these pale into significance when compared to the merits. By understanding the risks and taking the appropriate precautions, those who enjoy experiencing thrilling sensations in sports could have the right to pursue their preferences.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
In recent years, the question of whether extreme sports such as sky diving and s...
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Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...stion of whether extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing should be prohibited or not ...
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Line 2, column 228, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...th on participants. For instance, those who are sky diving could be in danger such as l...
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Line 2, column 236, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...rticipants. For instance, those who are sky diving could be in danger such as losing navig...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ng factor to the economic development. In conclusion, although demerits of extrem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18309859155 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84622205112 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535211267606 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.4374453833 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.428571429 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3571428571 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21752165317 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806260721134 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060742578158 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143888624562 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579945242055 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.