Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Majority of people contend that adventure sports like parachuting and skiing are very perilous and it should be forbidden while some communities argue that it is not dilemma in social life. Personally, I disagree with this statement to some extent and I will elaborate more below.
Today, prohibition of extreme sports is an agreement because of the danger, contributing the number of mortality.That is to say, this activity is not safety at all, having a tendency to risk their life, and if some accident happen, the certainty will be a death. For instance, when all young people n Central Java like to climb the Merbabu cliffs, even people have followed the rules and cheked the equipment according to the climbing basecamp. However, many of them died due to erratic weather conditions, one of which was strong winds, causing friction on the rope so that the rope’s resistance was reduced and the rope broke which made the climber fall, increasing the number of death due to doing outdoor activity from 20% in 2018 to 30% in 2020.
Furthermore, adventure sports has benefit to relieve people’s stress level. This is because, these activities can discharge stress homones, namely cortisol and generate endorphins which can relieve pain naturally and improve mood somebody. For example, many people from any regions around West Java come to Majalengka trying parachuting after working or studying for a long day, since the human body has limit stamina and human brain can not be forced to do some works thus people find way to refresh the brain.
In conclusion, it seems to me that extreme sports is excellent activities to relieve the rate of stress as long as if society who pick out these activities using proper equipment and preparation and in the presence of an expert.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
...r, contributing the number of mortality.That is to say, this activity is not safety ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0033557047 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62320181922 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624161073826 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.5983483748 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.666666667 106.682146367 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1111111111 20.7667163134 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5555555556 7.06120827912 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139943028594 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617633877384 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534774964547 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924102928899 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071543577136 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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