Gay marriage law becomes an uncontrolled controversial issues in oursocitey.Many people encourage for government to accept this law whilepeople think that it will dirty the natural human rules between the manand woman.Can you explain your idea about this

Essay topics:

Gay marriage law becomes an uncontrolled controversial issues in our
socitey.Many people encourage for government to accept this law while
people think that it will dirty the natural human rules between the man
and woman.
Can you explain your idea about this problem ? Discuss both views.Write
an essay at least 360 words

Gay marriage law has become an argument in our community.Many people think that this marriage law should be approved by government but others believe that it has changed the marriage definition between a man and a woman. I totally agree with agreement this law
On the one hand, a group of people presume that it will be perfect if authority approve this law. This point can be attributed to a host of factor. Firstly, due to modern life, human has become changed both body and mind, they have many different thoughts and currently, there are more and more people who are gay often appear in the daily life. A large number of people believed that it is an unimportant issues and regard it as a normal thing. For example, today if we see them, we will not pay attention or even admire them as a celebrity. Secondly, in all countries’ law, every citizens, townspeople, human are completely good treated by happiness rights, protection rights, and the rights about being cared. Notwithstanding a part of people discriminate them, they invariably fight for the rights. Thirdly, there is a crowd of people advocate for LGBT organization. This is because some people disagree with this law are doing like being falsify for the human rights or today we have the evidence to prove for their right interest. It is undoubted truth that a range of distinguished people are gay but it does not impact on their career or their life.
One the other hand, it is widely thought that this law are transforming the natural human concept between woman and man. In fact, an array of people who was born in the 1990s or lower do not agree as it is effortless to perceive the cause that they have not seen any this kind of love before. It is apparent for them to regard this love as a different thing, eccentric and someone points out that it contrast natural rules. Apart from that, a lot of gay people partly critic a normal person that they are old-fashioned and it leads to an inferior LGBT community reputation in their mind. Especially, even some scientists find out that these people is having a considerable disease although it is not 100% absolutely accurate information and it affects to the people who read tabloid.
In conclusion, two points above have each advantages and drawbacks. Some people consider that this law should be accepted while others concern this as an unacceptable law. I contend that it would be better for government to approve this law.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 58, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Many
...has become an argument in our community.Many people think that this marriage law sho...
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Line 2, column 233, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...e changed both body and mind, they have many different thoughts and currently, there are more ...
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Line 2, column 347, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...are gay often appear in the daily life. A large number of people believed that it is an unimporta...
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Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r lower do not agree as it is effortless to perceive the cause that they have not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, apart from, even so, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 24.0651302605 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 427.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75644028103 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6772626408 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512880562061 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0793918422 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.894736842 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377363264094 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118197388973 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903937507985 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266572117457 0.151304729494 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667928259429 0.056905535591 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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