The government should spend money to protect the wild animals which are endangered but others think the extinction of wild animals is a natural phenomena and thus ministry should not waste money

Essay topics:

The government should spend money to protect the wild animals which are endangered but others think the extinction of wild animals is a natural phenomena and thus ministry should not waste money.

This day, it is believed that in some the government should spend money to protect the wild animals which are endangered but others think the extinction of wild animals is natural phenomena and thus ministry should not waste money.
In the one hand, I agree if the government had badger to conserve the wild animals. It is because, not only human has right to live but also the animals have it. For the example the ministry must have estimate money to health care, security wood and up grade electronic to detection animals mobility in forest, while the employees have a dig up information about condition and total the animals in ecosystem. As result to preserve the animals for constants in the world.
On the one hand, not only in Indonesia but also in other countries, this is a serious problem when the administrator do not have calculation to the wild animals will be worse the condition. For the example, in this era many poaching for keeping rare animals, because they get expansive price and the people who want to buy to be pets. As results the wild animals will be extinct when on one handled wisely.
In conclusion, the government should cooperate with employees and the society for richly life the animals and they have to be wise, when some people take default role.

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Average: 3.8 (2 votes)
Essays by user Afiotria Intan… :

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the people who want to buy to be pets. As results the wild animals will be extinc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1062.0 1615.20841683 66% => OK
No of words: 224.0 315.596192385 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74107142857 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48437399724 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3910643599 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8888888889 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.455559593724 0.244688304435 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185892055699 0.084324248473 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.25174965545 0.0667982634062 377% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328752539952 0.151304729494 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.323162750512 0.056905535591 568% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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