Governments should provide care and finance for retired people while others believe that people themselves should save money when they get older Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Governments should provide care and finance for retired people while others believe that people themselves should save money when they get older. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is true that when people advance into their golden years, they require more help and attention. Although I believe that the elderly who stopped working should be provided pension and support from the government, they also need to have their own savings.
On the one hand, it is necessary for the government to look after and provide financial aid for retired citizens since they all have made certain contributions to society and the nation's economy through paying the taxes. In addition, the elderly people who have stopped working need to draw a pension to get access to basic amenities such as food, accommodation, and health…, especially when their children are far away. So that, as a way to ensure the inhabitants' life, the government ought to offer the elderly money-related assistance and care services, for example, regular free-of-charge health checkups and discounted medicines.
On the other hand, there are a variety of reasons why the inhabitants who have stopped working need to have a certain amount of money by saving. To begin with, the allowance from the authorities is only adequate to meet basic living needs but can not pay for other expenditures, among which entertainment, fashion or travel are typical examples. Therefore, the retired citizens have to save their own money to satisfy those demands. The second reason is that relying entirely on governmental support can cause a huge financial burden on the state budget. This is because the public funding is used to spend on fields which are essential in deciding the comprehensive development of the nation. Spending excessive amounts of money on public welfare will harm the budget used to solve pressing social issues such as environmental pollution or the housing crisis.
In conclusion, while providing financial support and attention to citizens who have retired is indispensable, I still contend that there is also a need for them to have a sum of money from saving to fulfill all the requirements, which can not be paid just by the benefits from the government.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ertain contributions to society and the nations economy through paying the taxes. In ad...
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Line 2, column 453, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'inhabitants'' or 'inhabitant's'?
Suggestion: inhabitants'; inhabitant's
...r away. So that, as a way to ensure the inhabitants life, the government ought to offer the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09495548961 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84098556962 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560830860534 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.9900784862 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.083333333 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0833333333 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6666666667 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197835177422 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676407301265 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424661216636 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12481117027 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04074621685 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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