The graph shows the number of visitors to two museums in a country from 2000 to 2015

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The graph shows the number of visitors to two museums in a country from 2000 to 2015.

The line graph illustrates how many people visited two museums in one country in a fifteen-year period, between 2000 and 2015.
From an overall perspective, what stands out from the graph is that this period witnessed considerable fluctuation. Another striking point to note is that in 2000, the number of visitors to the Natural Museum was higher than in History Museum, but in 2015, more visitors chose History Museum instead of another.
Looking at the details, as regards the Natural Museum, the figure for visiting started at 80,000, then it plunged in the next three years and reached over 20,000 visitors in 2003 after recovering to 70,000 in 2004. After that, the figure went down slightly, at which point it remained stable at 50,000 until 2008. In the next two years, the number of people who visited the Natural Museum shot up to a peak of 90,000. Then the figure declined dramatically, finishing at around 40,000 visitors in 2015.
By contrast, the number of History Museum’s visitors went in the opposite direction. Having started at 20,000, the figure then peaked at nearly 90,000 in 2003. The figure fell rapidly in 2004 before fluctuating between around 30,000 and over 40,000 in the period of seven years, from 2004 to 2010. 2011 saw a marginally rise to 50,000. Finally, there was a levelling off in the last 5 years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 308, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('marginally') instead an adjective, or a noun ('rise') instead of another adjective.
...even years, from 2004 to 2010. 2011 saw a marginally rise to 50,000. Finally, there was a levelli...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, look, then, as regards

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 24.0651302605 25% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1116.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91629955947 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48501105419 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 176.041082164 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581497797357 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 308.7 506.74238477 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1649362935 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282629970457 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107667644008 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108953289475 0.0667982634062 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213177875095 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118833543085 0.056905535591 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 50.2224549098 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.3001002004 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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