The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the trend that advertising soaring sales of goods and inducing consumers to purchase what they do not need has been receiving a great deal of public attention. In my opinion, I believe that advertising has the power to entice people to buy unnecessary things.
There are several reasons why advertisements have the power to boost sales. first, since advertising uses a repetitive strategy on social media, customers will remember advertised products and feel prompted and to shop. In fact, the internet and television support advertising in displaying products at high frequency, making consumers able to find an excuse to shop. second, by paying a large amount of money to celebrities for branding endorsement, advertisers have made it easy for the majority of people to go shopping, especially the youth. this means that brand representatives will attract a large number of loyal fans who are willing to spend money buying products advertised by their idols, leading to buying craze as a result.
On the other hand, I think that people purchase things that they do not need because of advertising. first, advertisements persuade people to follow the latest trend, which makes them replace the thing that still could be used by the new one. iphone, for example, displays every year without noticeable innovations, but always brings a massive amount of sales for Apple company, especially the iphone 12 which accounts for 42% of global smartphone revenue because of their marketing strategy. second, advertising manipulates buyers by exaggerating the accounts of their products with glossy photos. In this way, customers will buy the products without realizing the real one could be different from the one in the photos, which makes them frustrated and no longer use them.
In conclusion, with the convincing arguments mentioned above, I agree that the power of advertising is reflected by a large number of sales not the real need of society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, still, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2126984127 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84810563697 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584126984127 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9845469851 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.307692308 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230648025968 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861966097204 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662264726587 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167204262439 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642577371123 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.