IELTS wrting task 1 test 1 cambridge ielts 8

There is no denying that,man are social animal,and to pushing up forward this planet person considering the key factor. Many people claim that, it is parents essential responsibility to teach children become a good membre of society. While, other beleive it's school duty to teach the child basic ethics of the surroundings. To my way of thinking, mutual efforts from both sides on balance way a needed to guide youngster to how give their services in the communities.
To start with, mother lap is the place where infant learn initial tranning, so house is the very first learning insitute. In addition, newborn have habbit to imitate there elders, so what the head of family do offspring follow the trend. Furthermore, whatever adolecent adopt in early stages of learning will remain him throughout his life, there forefather set an examples of rules which lead help the person in upcoming outsides event. To cite an example, how to obey others, in which way we help somebody else, what things should do to be responsible unit of the state, these all key factors will be taught from homeside. Personally speaking this inner education give alote of benefites to learners.
In contrast, some think that, schools have all the duties to form a individual better patriotic humen being. It is worth considering, educational institutions is the mixtures of various communites, in these gathering bost up learning capability of the soul. Furthermore, acadmies taught so many new things that are impossible to know from home. To illustrate, social gathering gives new ideas, open unique way of thinking under guide line of the teachers. Highly specialised members are appointed in the school, whom have great source of knowledge and firmly experience in regarding field. From my prespective, these administration authorties lead the students on right path in every sector of life.
To sum up, in the battel of either father and mother train the kid to compete the outer chalngings or it's work don by school side, in my view together efforts will b fruitfull to gain optimum best results.

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Average: 2.1 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , man
There is no denying that,man are social animal,and to pushing up for...
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Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...is no denying that,man are social animal,and to pushing up forward this planet perso...
^^^^
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ildren become a good membre of society. While, other beleive its school duty to teach...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 59, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to initial'
Suggestion: to initial
...her lap is the place where infant learn initial tranning, so house is the very first le...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bit to imitate there elders, so what the head of family do offspring follow the ...
^^
Line 2, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...here elders, so what the head of family do offspring follow the trend. Furthermo...
^^
Line 2, column 364, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an example' or simply 'examples'?
Suggestion: an example; examples
...roughout his life, there forefather set an examples of rules which lead help the person in ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 424, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'outsides'' or 'outside's'?
Suggestion: outsides'; outside's
... which lead help the person in upcoming outsides event. To cite an example, how to obey ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...at, schools have all the duties to form a individual better patriotic humen being...
^
Line 3, column 611, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this administration' or 'these administrations'?
Suggestion: this administration; these administrations
...n regarding field. From my prespective, these administration authorties lead the students on right p...
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Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...compete the outer chalngings or its work don by school side, in my view together ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, while, in addition, in contrast, in my view, to start with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06104651163 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73675920259 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651162790698 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5582880334 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8125 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.244688304435 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.084324248473 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.151304729494 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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