With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people.
Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is considered that, according to contemporary world advancements in the present day health care, society has to look after the increasing number of senior citizens. However, in latter we can discuss and find an solution.
Firstly, there is not even a iota of doubt that modern world has witnessed great achievements in health protection. For instance, the up gradation in medical field has impact on society. Robotic equipment are used for surgeries and new machinery system has evolved within a generation in a decade. Although, there are repercussions which follows.It is felt that society is lagging behind in taking care of senior cities and their requirements with no monetary benefits or job opportunities they cannot lead a peaceful life.Measures have to be taken to solve this problem.
On the other hand, i am advocate about the fact that community can collaborate with governments which benefits the elderly people. Investing economy on residential buildings for them with amenities which support their lifestyle. Residential colonies with one big community for only senior people with recreational activities, health care protection services with lost. These things make older generations live happily in the community. Furthermore, job opportunities in financial field or consultancy field can be related by older generations.To delineate an example, developed countries like China , Japan have their elderly benefits with job opportunities. Also the concept of residency for senior people is on the go.
To conclude, Though there are improvements in this advanced world people tend to forget the effort behind the people who made this world to improve, so it is required to take care of the older generation for better community life.
It is considered that, according to contemporary world advancements in the present day health care, society has to look after the increasing number of senior citizens. However, in latter we can discuss and find an solution.
Firstly, there is not even a iota of doubt that modern world has witnessed great achievements in health protection. For instance, the up gradation in medical field has impact on society. Robotic equipment are used for surgeries and new machinery system has evolved within a generation in a decade. Although, there are repercussions which follows.It is felt that society is lagging behind in taking care of senior cities and their requirements with no monetary benefits or job opportunities they cannot lead a peaceful life.Measures have to be taken to solve this problem.
On the other hand, i am advocate about the fact that community can collaborate with governments which benefits the elderly people. Investing economy on residential buildings for them with amenities which support their lifestyle. Residential colonies with one big community for only senior people with recreational activities, health care protection services with lost. These things make older generations live happily in the community. Furthermore, job opportunities in financial field or consultancy field can be related by older generations.To delineate an example, developed countries like China , Japan have their elderly benefits with job opportunities. Also the concept of residency for senior people is on the go.
To conclude, Though there are improvements in this advanced world people tend to forget the effort behind the people who made this world to improve, so it is required to take care of the older generation for better community life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, so, as to, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50740740741 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22219733842 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618518518519 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 107.886993219 49.4020404114 218% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 135.181818182 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5454545455 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72727272727 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272970718336 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088682254299 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488873617672 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147401703768 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052268445819 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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