It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for example for sport or music and others are not However it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a sports person or musician Discuss both views and

It is often said that a large number of people all over the world are drawing attention to the thing making a person a excellent performer or a talented individual. In fact, there are some who hold firmly to their belief that some children are born with talents and skills which are very obvious like those who are talented in playing music from the early age or those who have physical and mental power which is fact exceed their age. Hower, other argue convincingly that people can become an excellent achieve by receiving the right teaching and proper direction. Therefore, some major points will be addressed in the following paragraphs.

On the one hand, there are two primary points for people to defend the former argument. First of all, people who are born with a natural aptitude for singing, drawing or sports can acquire proficiency in those fields with relatively less effort. The most obvious example to prove is that people who as genius are likely to find it easy when they practise. Furthermore, there is no doubt that having certain talents put people one step ahead of others who do not and this can be the deciding factor in being admitted to a professional club to enhance their ability. It is just that achieving success is relatively easier.

O the orther hand, there are two main evidences for other people to support the latter argument. First and foremost it is commonly accepted that practice makes man perfect. Even if somebody is not born with exception artistic or athletic talents it is still possible for them to acquire excellence in the field of their choice through constant practice. Equally important, any child can develop outstanding skills that they are trained well. A clear example being found to prove is that all ofg the national soccer team always invite the professions in order to aid soccer player better.

In conclusion, it is my strong belief that through consistent practice it is possible for anyone to achieve expertise in lots of fields for instance arts, sports and so on. Accordingly, i highly recommend that governments should encourage people put in efforts as well as practices regularly to gain anything they want in life. If recommendation is caried out, the comprehensive development of our generation will be ensured.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86753246753 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53325462294 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553246753247 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 385.0 20.2975951904 1897% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1874.0 106.682146367 1757% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 385.0 20.7667163134 1854% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 137.0 7.06120827912 1940% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294921977741 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.294921977741 0.084324248473 350% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16722138126 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430668637218 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 194.0 13.0946893788 1482% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -310.84 50.2224549098 -619% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 152.3 11.3001002004 1348% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.45 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.18 8.58950901804 305% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 9.78957915832 541% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 156.0 10.1190380762 1542% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 156.0 10.7795591182 1447% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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