it is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance for sport or music and others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. discuss both these views

Talent is something that we are good at and passionate at. There are so many different kind of talent. Many people believe, talent is a gift that is gotten since people were born. It means people born with a certain talent. The other people believe that learn is the best way to get a talent. I believe talents are created by learning times by times even since born.

In my opinion children do not know what kind of talent that they have. Parents as the first teacher of the child teach how to be good at something, because child is able to learn faster. The child will be a professional with a certain talent if their parents keep the child to practice everyday. For example, my traditional dance teacher has a daughter who is a professional traditional dancer too. My teacher socialized her daughter to be passionate at traditional dancing and they repetite to dance everyday. But I can not ignore that my teacher and her daughter have a skinny body so it is easyer to do many movements. People get their posture of body from their parents genes.

It is possible for a fat people to be a professional dancer, but it will be harder because they will get tired easyly. According to physical anthropology, every children inherit their parents genes so posture of body is a gift. I believe if my teacher and her daughter are a fat, traditional dansing is not what they are passionate at.

The conclution, people were not only born with a certain talent. They learn, repeat and are supported by certain genes of their parents. If parents have talent related to their body, then their children will easly learn and talented at the same thing as their parents. I believe that talent on sport and music are got by the same way as traditional dancing.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many
...good at and passionate at. There are so many different kind of talent. Many people believe, ta...
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Suggestion: kinds
...sionate at. There are so many different kind of talent. Many people believe, talent ...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...heir parents keep the child to practice everyday. For example, my traditional dance teac...
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...onal dancing and they repetite to dance everyday. But I can not ignore that my teacher a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, for example, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62820512821 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54058930508 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 176.041082164 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423076923077 0.561755894193 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.061273952 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.2 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05 7.06120827912 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21135063313 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080955855971 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645138676528 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137118947573 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451858223922 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.58950901804 79% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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