It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views

The important of talents in sports and music, which generates a great deal of heated debates, has now even more controversial. While some people maintain that the success of some one in these subjects bases on their talents, I believe that people could be taught to be professional.

At the outset, there are myriad of reasons why talents are important in sport and music. First, scientists demonstrated that some people was born with suitable condition to success in these fields. For example, Africans men and women often obtained Olympic medal for running because of their structure of muscle which help them to run faster and longer. Another point can be taken into consideration is that some children born in the family with tradition in sport and music can obtain talents from their parent and easy to archive in their future career. Actually, by contact with art from young age, children become familiar with them hence easy to get achievements.

On the other hand, exercising and training is also very important in sport and music. In fact, people with talents could not be success without practicing. An instance illustrating this statement come from the fact that many young talents after some achievement at young age could not continue their success when they grow up. By contract, some people do not show any special at the earlier but after years of practicing they build their own professional. For example, Jimmy Vardy, an English footballer had a start point as a staff in a restaurant, however with his passion and effort, he archived success in football as premier league champion.

In conclusion, although talent is important for one's success, a continuing trained contributes the more important role. Because of this, nowadays, every body need to practicing day by day in order to maintain their success in their career.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07540983607 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62693140576 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580327868852 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8617921673 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.571428571 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7857142857 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246488838636 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882407109083 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540191340724 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152454428146 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787374815805 0.056905535591 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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