Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.
Which do you consider to be the major influence?
The important of talent which frequently generated a great deal of heated debates has now become even more controversial. While some proponent maintain that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development, in my opinion experiences acquired in one’s life have more influence.
At the outset, there are a myriad of reasons why experiences are more important but the most conspicuous one comes from the fact that even if someone was born with certain talents, it is impossible to develop these talent without real life practice. An instance illustrates this action is the fact that some footballer wasn’t born with a lot of talents but by training and acquiring experiences by every matches they play, they success in their career. Another point to be taken into consideration come from the fact that some young talents can’t develop their career because they didn’t go in the correct ways. This is not incomprehensible but practical and we can find innumerable examples from newspaper.
On the other hand, research also shows that the characteristics that people born with can be changed when they grow up. In fact, in many cases, one have to train their-self to adopt career’s requirement. For example, someone who work in customer services have to change their attitude to satisfy their customer. What’s more, another example is the fact some companies in recruitment process also more appreciated candidatures’ experience than their education records in their childhood.
In conclusion, taking these points into consideration, from a personal perspective, I’m inclined to support people’s experiences. More researches hence required to demonstrate how’s the influence of experiences in one’s career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...fluence. At the outset, there are a myriad of reasons why experiences are more imp...
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Message: Did you mean 'this talent' or 'these talents'?
Suggestion: this talent; these talents
...in talents, it is impossible to develop these talent without real life practice. An instance...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in many cases, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2506650305 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618181818182 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2180661383 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.333333333 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9166666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249361939825 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967458512473 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107367508691 0.0667982634062 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171829655283 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114359825718 0.056905535591 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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