It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives.
Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
People should take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. In this essay, I will explain why the benefits of taking risks overshadow the potential drawbacks.
On the one hand, taking risks can offer a few challenges. Firstly, people will have difficulties in their lives because taking risks can lead them to failure. When risks are taken by people who work as professionals, they may face social sanctions that cause a stressful life. Furthermore, their personal lives will be affected by their decision to take risks. If they are persons who are give up easily, it is difficult for them to start a new life again because of demotivation and may lead them to suicide if they do not get some helps from their relatives.
On the other hand, despite the challenges, I would argue that taking risks can pose more benefits. Firstly, it helps people to become more mature. People can learn how to make decisions carefully from their failures in their workplaces. Thus, they will obtain wisdom from their bad experience. Secondly, taking risks potentially lead people to a big success to their lives personally. It will open many opportunities for them to improve their interpersonal and intrapersonal skills.
In conclusion, while people would gain many challenges when taking risks such as social punishments and may cause death, they will obtain opportunity to learn how to be wise and see many choices in this life. Therefore, on balance, I remain firmly convinced that the demerits are eclipsed by the merits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...sion to take risks. If they are persons who are give up easily, it is difficult for the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05490196078 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72532373592 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545098039216 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.0815406063 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9333333333 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344060751212 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133065660079 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912770545191 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23270970761 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981388673221 0.056905535591 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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