It is more important for school children to learn local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
There are some debate given that students’ local history learning is more important than theirs global one. Standing on my opinion, I truly disagree with this view. It is true that the history of individual homeland plays a crucial role in their conscious process. Nevertheless, world history is as valuable as one, especially today’s tendency is globalisation and international integration.
On the one hand, having thorough insights into local history brings manifold benefit to develop children’s patriotism. As an illustration of that, while children of a secondary school in my hometown were taught about the vital sacrifice of previous generations to protect of their sovereignty, they felt much prouder of their origin. In addition, that encourages youngsters to claim their own traditional values and identity. Personally, I think teaching students their own history is surely necessary to understand their hometown.
From another angle, world history has equal advantages as local ones. Achieving knowledge of the world’s past events helps students have a well-rounded perspective of life. Their understanding on various aspects of the world will be improved through lessons about the World War or Feminism protects against women’s abuse and discrimination. Furthermore, being taught the other countries historical backgrounds would assist young learners in their future career. Students who accumulate knowledge of this field at an early age would have a solid foundation to work for foreign enterprises, particularly those work for Japan which has a highly value company culture.
In conclusion, reclaiming my belief, the significance of local history is as equal as global one. Both of them are momentous factors to construct their own perceptions of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, nevertheless, second, so, well, while, i think, in addition, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65427509294 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06826826042 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665427509294 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8159788205 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.4 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9333333333 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242805409638 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820435769003 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772937212998 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146457385268 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715970090678 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.19 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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