It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Every year the governments of the world spend hours on ends accounting how to use their budget effectively, Correspondingly, the subject of health is often debated, some individuals contend that money should be prioritized for the prevention and promote better living standard instead of squandering their fund on palliative cares. There are certain pros and cons to each approach. From my perspective, I think we should tackle the problem from its roots.
By and large, many would agree that prevention is better than cure. There are enormous positives to spend more on health education to promote a healthy lifestyle. Were such a strategy implemented the number of people suffering from preventable illness would decrease, For example, the risk of over-eating, and thereby leading to ailments such as diabetes or heart disease, is present in many countries, if people were more health conscious , such sickness can be minimized.
On the other hand, this proposal can have a devastating effect on the people who were already suffering from an illness. First and foremost, when less funds are available for the treatment of other fatal diseases, it can increase the mortality rate of the illnesses. For instance, if researchers were not given a sufficient amount of money to develop a cure for types of disorder, it can have a ripple effect on society.
Notwithstanding the problems mentioned, the promotion of a healthy lifestyle should still be given more care. The reason being that we can allocate the money that was previously used for treating preventable conditions to serious ones.
To conclude, the investment in the betterment of a healthy lifestyle has many benefits including a decrease in the prevalence of diseases which should save an abundant amount of revenue. Problems with creating a cure for other infirmities can be rectified by administering capital smartly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun funds is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, still, for example, for instance, i think, such as, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30564784053 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96615005324 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591362126246 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.5680638867 49.4020404114 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.846153846 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191940209413 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654090236824 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569437324508 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974693957209 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575596006691 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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