It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people.To what extend do you agree or disagree

There has always been controversy as regards whether or not government should allocate fund for tertiary education to a massive of adolescents. I am strongly the opinion that it is not only essential but also impossible for the following reasons.
On the one hand, a majority of students attend higher education is not feasible. Initially, students enter higher institution while they do not have ability to higher knowledge. As the result, they may lead to drop out of school and being in capable of becoming crime evils. Furthermore, the fee of tertiary education is extremely exorbitant that some people cannot afford. For example, university of finance and marketing is one of the most prestigious economic training schools in Viet Nam; however, the tuition fee is far higher that student could not pay.
On the other hand, the investment of university education is not necessary and vital in comparison with the economic development in developing countries where having a majority of poverty people. Firstly, at some poor countries pay the priority of attention to construct infrastructures such as subways, hospital, elementary schools… to create the opportunity of enhancing their knowledge and provide a basic-need for citizens. Secondly, the lack of manual workers when all of them pursuing higher academic schools. Consequently, vacancies such as taxi drivers, construction workers will lack workforce while the increase of unemployment rates in several modern fields including science and technology which have too many applicants. As the result, there will be an imbalance in labor market and still be poor nation.
In conclusion, I hold firm to belief that the government cater for tertiary education was not significant, event impractical.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... has always been controversy as regards whether or not government should allocate fund for ter...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, as regards, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42700729927 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01797455048 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627737226277 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7021327168 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.384615385 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.3846153846 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114542594836 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0359585238925 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359215515419 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0697981717162 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160579791292 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.