In this modern era, thanks to the advance in both science and technology fields, scientists and visitors are capable of travelling to isolated natural habitats such as the South Pole. From my point of view, this development could solve the current overpopulation, however, the environmental dilemma could be revitalised as well as the potential hazard of visiting in such a harsh condition of those areas could be experienced
To begin with, by sending scientists to remote areas, they could make progress in their fields, especially in medical treatments. Given the explanation, due to the fact that numerous plants have not been discovered in some isolated lands, researchers could collect some of the samples in those areas to the laboratory, subsequently, conducting research into applications of those. As a result, this could help them in discovering new medicines,thus, assisting people in curing patients. For instance, the scientists have figured out a kind of fungi called Cordyceps, which could support doctors to tackle kidney disorders. By this discovery, the proportion of people suffering from this ailment has declined in recent years.
However, there are two reasons that travelling to distant areas can affect both the environment as well as humans’ safety. First and foremost, increasing tourists to those areas could lead to pollution of the environment. To be more specific, strangers usually tend to litter trash to the place they visit, instead of throwing it into the bin. As a result, the amount of garbage in remote regions would rise, putting the environment in danger. Furthermore, since animals in those areas are not under control, people could be put in hazardous situations, specifically being attacked by those dangerous species. As an illustration, an American who travelled to the South Pole, was dead after being chased by a polar bear.
In conclusion, although travelling to remote areas could benefit the scientists in their fields, this could lead to ecological disaster, as well as pose a menace to the visitors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3527607362 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96902726285 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573619631902 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.0625715638 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.230769231 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0769230769 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224037212774 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796417333405 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052085817181 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144213608645 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310427839031 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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