It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media.
Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime?
What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?
There is an opinion that violence in the media can result in the growth of juvenile delinquency. Thus , I agree that media might be the major cause;however, some solutions are still possible to tackle this problem.
To begin with, children tend to copy almost everything they see from their early ages.In this case, due to some innovations in the contemporary world,many children have an access to television. Most of time they spend watching both captivating programmes and cartoons. However , when left alone without one's supervision, children can watch some movies or serials dedicated to adults. As a result , all that cruel actions get left in teen's mind. Then, perceiving this as normal, young people make efforts to try it in a real life. Therefore, impact of media may be significant.
Fortunately, there are some efficient ways to solve this dilemma. Firstly, restriction of television access minimizes a chance for children to get involved in crime. This seems to be the most effective and beneficial solution, for young can start to discover the environment which surround them. Secondly, parents can block block channels and programmes for adults. This would also definitely have a positive effect on a child's development in a whole.
To conclude, media resources are certainly underlaying factors of the increase of offences among teenagers. Yet, there are some useful ways to deal with this issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1185.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22026431718 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85241581689 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.651982378855 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 368.1 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6715884455 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1333333333 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248923785935 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740150990004 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530884694947 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155040867439 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597579332692 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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