It is suugested that everyone wants to have a car electricity, and a fridge. Do disadvantage of this development for society outweigh advantage?
It is true that almost everyone wants a car, a tv and a fridge as some of the basic things of a good lifestyle. In my opinion, I believe that On a long term view these are outweigh by the disadvantages.
Admitedly, the growing consumption of cars, televisions and fridges has several benefits. The increasing sales figures of cars and household equipment are often associated with more jobs and wealth being created for society. Another benefit is that people can have a higher standard of living than before. Travelling on the road is no longer tedious because individuals can sit in a car, listening to music and enjoying the comfort of air conditioning. In the same way, people may watch television to relax or to gain knowledge, and fridge help them preserve food longer without being stale.
Nevertheless, I believe that the above advantages are outweighed by potential problems. Primarily,
the use of car is often help responsible for environmental pollution. Exhaust emissions from automobiles impair the air quality and consequently affect people's health. For example, urban citizens are suffering from chronic respiratory problems due to the poor air quality. Using fridges and televisions also places a pressure on electricity supply in the world. The growing use of these devices in the home merely compounds the problem of sufficient electricity that has become intractable in many parts of the world.
In conclusion, all the available data provide concrete evidence that excessive use of these modern inventions can have adverse effect on the environment and health of the society, regardless of their benefits, thus, I believe that the demerits of a tv, a car or a fridge, overshadow it's merits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1438.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48854961832 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.53543650696 2.80592935109 126% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637404580153 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 65.0 20.2975951904 320% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 177.92273604 49.4020404114 360% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 359.5 106.682146367 337% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 65.5 20.7667163134 315% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 30.75 7.06120827912 435% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.01903807615 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207290925928 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117257091257 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337894909621 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117257091257 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337894909621 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 37.2 13.0946893788 284% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -2.96 50.2224549098 -6% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.44779559118 244% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.8 11.3001002004 264% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.45 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.04 8.58950901804 140% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 9.78957915832 312% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.0 10.1190380762 277% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 10.7795591182 288% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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