Is local history more important than world history when it comes to what our schoolchildren should learn in class?

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Is local history more important than world history when it comes to what our schoolchildren should learn in class?

Nowadays, Some argue that schoolchildren should take more local history classes instead of world history. However, to my mind, while the national history helps a lot, it should not be seen as the only one that will benefit our posterity. Equally important, we need educational materials that are mindful of both local and world history. No one culture has a monopoly on excellence.

On the one hand, certainly, any civilization cannot last long without cherishing its history. Because we must learn from the past experiences. What’s more, national history helps improve state harmony. Every Dragon Festival, hundreds of thousands of Chinese people crowd along their local river to watch the yearly dragon boat competition, a great chance to enhance national solidarity. It cannot do without the Chinese historic poet, Qu Yuan.

On the other hand, a recognition that the population of the world can date back to outside their own country, underscores the urgent need for history textbooks to include Western countries, world wars, as well as the process of other civilizations. The history repeats itself, but in a different pattern each time. Therefore, it is necessarily wise to integrate our own history into the world one. Besides, to learn the outside world’s past helps our children to learn to think chronically and critically.

In conclusion, the task force on China’s curriculum revision must look beyond the span of Chinese history, which is rich and profound though. Moreover, only with respect towards both the world and our national history, can we acquire the true balance between the two.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...ly one that will benefit our posterity. Equally important, we need educational material...
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Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...st long without cherishing its history. Because we must learn from the past experiences...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...history. Because we must learn from the past experiences. What's more, national history hel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, with respect to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1369.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30620155039 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79784023514 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624031007752 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.4860314059 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2666666667 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308973934449 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976469060831 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990576947781 0.0667982634062 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168321918529 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998666376391 0.056905535591 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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