For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What can be done to draw people’s attention to art?
Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn there focus to science, technology and business.
Why do you think that is?
What would be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?
Art is one of the important pieces for everyone who lives on our planet. But we live in the age when many of us more and more prefer to concentrate on science, technologies, and business instead of art.
Let us start by considering the fact that art loses positions in society day by day. Take a look at the science. There are a lot of news from scientists about new discoveries and people like that. It is like a TV show, where folks can see that live changes every day. For example medicine. As I know, now doctors have found a solution how to treat cancer that was impossible one hundreds of years ago. It is incredible!
Secondly, new technologies such as the Internet, TV or radio broke into our live last twenty or thirty years. Now the gadgets are a daily part of our life. Most of us have a cellphone or a smart washing machine. That leads to decrease in interest in arts (странное предложение). People can get new and desired information much faster than before. And they do not want to go the special places such as theater or cinema. Because the movies can be watched at home via the Internet for instance.
Nowadays, humans do not have free time for art because of some reasons. One of them is a business. Actually, I am not so familiar with this but can assume that business takes much time. The biggest problem is work I guess. Most people spend much time at work for money. As a result, even if they want to visit a museum they cannot.
Today arts is not so popular. What is needed to improve the situation is definite actions which will help to promote arts for folks. Actually, the actions should be taken by governments. At least, they can open museums or galleries at night or provide a special lesson at schools about arts. There are a lot of other solutions which can improve the current situation.
To summarize, I believe that art is still popular in society but not enough. The main problem is the young. It is not so easy for them to understand how it is important to know and support art. My point of view that countries should provide ways how to improve the situation in the world. They cannot reduce new gadgets but they can share art via the Internet or make museums free for children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Consider using: 'one hundred'
Suggestion: one hundred
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Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one hundred', 'a hundred', or simply 'hundreds'?
Suggestion: one hundred; a hundred; hundreds
...how to treat cancer that was impossible one hundreds of years ago. It is incredible! Seco...
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Message: Use a singular form of the numeral here: 'one hundred'.
Suggestion: one hundred
...how to treat cancer that was impossible one hundreds of years ago. It is incredible! Secondl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, at least, for example, for instance, i guess, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 458.0 315.596192385 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55895196507 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62025108659 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526200873362 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.384769539078 1040% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 16.0721442886 218% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4186391006 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 59.6571428571 106.682146367 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.0857142857 20.7667163134 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68571428571 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.38176352705 205% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 3.4128256513 322% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274082961855 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602192940128 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693697805212 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131752185246 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070966131014 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 13.0946893788 50% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 50.2224549098 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.3001002004 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.28 12.4159519038 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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