Many adults nowadays prefer spending their free time playing computer games.
Is this a positive or negative development?
Recently, many adults prefer to spend their spare time playing computer games. In my opinion, this phenomenon will have several bad impacts for them due to some reasons.
One of the reasons I argue this trend has a negative effect is that it can disturb mental health. This is because individuals who play games will not rest until a game is finished, so they will forget about other regular activities. For instance, if some people obtain leisure time for one or three days, they will play games for more than 24 hours and, of course, neglect their sleep time because the blue light which is emitted by screens is able to disrupt the production of a hormone which regulates sleep. As a result, poor sleep quality would omit their focus and most likely anxiety and depression.
As well as this, the activity can cause antisocial behavior. Although they have virtual friends from multiplayer games such as Valorant and Mobile Legend to replace real-world interactions, this makes them into introverted personalities in real life. In other words, they would rather play games than socialize with people around them such as family and friends so this reduces opportunities for spontaneous social interactions. The best example is individuals who are addicted to playing games will make them stay in their room.
To sum up, I still stand for my position that the trend that spending free time by playing games for adults is able to lead to mental health issues and promote social isolation.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, well, for instance, of course, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1243.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95219123506 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49467298047 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621513944223 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6772457607 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8181818182 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9090909091 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324391071927 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125497065711 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11710335909 0.0667982634062 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208742180707 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666987367579 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d impacts for them due to some reasons. One of the reasons I argue this trend ha...
^^^
Line 2, column 20, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
... to some reasons. One of the reasons I argue this trend has a negative effect ...
^
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ames will make them stay in their room. To sum up, I still stand for my position...
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Line 4, column 12, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
... them stay in their room. To sum up, I still stand for my position that the tr...
^
Line 4, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th issues and promote social isolation.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, well, for instance, of course, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1243.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95219123506 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49467298047 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621513944223 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6772457607 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8181818182 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9090909091 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324391071927 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125497065711 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11710335909 0.0667982634062 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208742180707 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666987367579 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.