In many countries, average life expectancy has been increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and for society as a whole? Suggest some solutions.
Whether we like it or not, we have to admit that recent years have witnessed the increase in average life expectancy. To find remedies for this thorny issue, it is imperative to understand the adverse consequences of this phenomenon first.
In my opinion, there are two adverse outcomes resulting from this thorny issue. To the best of my knowledge, the most prominent problem brought by this phenomenon would be that the retirement age might be delayed, which can exert a profound impact on everyone. The old are generally more experienced, which means young employees might have less opportunities of promotion. For instance, someone may work as a deputy director for decades until the director retires. However, he himself is about to retire few years later. consequently, not only do the company have to change directors frequently, but the employees could not have better career prospects. Another severe consequence would be that the government may fail to break even on the social welfare. As a result, the government may have to tax more to pay such a large bill.
To resolve this worrying issue requires concerted efforts from relevant parties involved. On the part of individuals, it is of great importance to improve the working capacity and seize the opportunities to get a better position. Meanwhile, it is also significant for companies to establish a competitive mechanism that is friendlier to young employees. As far as the government is concerned, they can help solve this matter by offering sufficient social security so that the old can enjoy their retirement.
In summary, the phenomenon is a serious matter which requires the joint efforts of individuals, social organizations and the government in order to address it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, while, for instance, in summary, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2296819788 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96568124845 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590106007067 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2815597925 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8666666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109242191533 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340900569596 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421049719598 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0640785739735 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045153839437 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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