In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In recent years, the problem of childhood obesity and unhealthiness has become more and more severe in some nations. There is a school of thought that the government should be accountable for tackling this issue and I agree with this assertion.
To commence with, as the government is responsible for maintaining and improving the economic growth of its country, it must ensure steps to manage and enhance the health of its youth. To be more specific, unhealthy children would mean an unhealthy future generation of a nation, which would result in a slowdown of the economy as a whole. For example, an adult suffering from diabetes at an early age would not be able to consistently work efficiently as he would constantly suffer from lethargy and mental weakness. In contrast, good health would facilitate well-rounded development in the knowledge of teenagers which creates a competent young workforce in the future. Indeed, if a child does not suffer from diseases, he is likely to absorb knowledge effectively and gain better academic performance with a clear mind.
Moreover, it is national authorities who should be the pioneers in addressing the deteriorating young generation’s health because they could utilize their power to implement some solutions in the most effective ways. First and foremost, the national authorities should focus on educating children about the detrimental impacts of being obese. For instance, the federal budget should be located for some healthcare programs on social media where nutrition experts would give young audiences detailed explanations about obesity’s harmful effects as well as measures, to curb this illness. In addition, States have the power to prohibit or reduce the frequency of advertisements on foods and drinks that contain high levels of sugar and fat. In fact, since 2017, a ban on junk foods and soft drink promotions before 9 p.m. has come into effect in the UK to let children stay away from fast food.
In conclusion, preventing the young generation from being overweight and suffering from diseases should be the government’s onus with the context of this matter is more and more prevalent in modern society
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41228070175 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15503037736 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616959064327 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.0200649257 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.384615385 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3076923077 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07692307692 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129446190805 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475137455735 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339463255967 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872988712946 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358382315074 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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