Many countries spend much money in developing tourism industry. Tourism is often considered as a promising industry that supports economic development. However, some people think that it destroys natural surroundings and traditions. Which do you agree with?
It is true that governments invest a great amount of money developing tourism business. Although the industry can promote local economy, it seems that tourism industry may cause too much damage to the local environment and culture. This essay will discuss the issue in detail.
To begin with, there are some people aruging that tourism certainly benefit to many developing countries in financial ways. According to them, tourism encourage people to visit new countries and that results in spending much money in experiencing culture and living style of the hosting country. For instance, the statistics shows that Brazil earned a great amount of revenue after hosting 2016 Olympics. However, despite economic benefits, the tourism business can accompany environment and culture risks.
Firstly, this business can destruct the nature. To specify this, due to the construction of seaside resorts along with pubs and nightclubs the costal scenery is ruined. Additionally, tourism also violates local culture. Since local people adapt to the new and advanced culture easily, when they contact with tourists, their authenticity is lost. As an example, Jeju island was popular with their distinctive traditional custom. However, due to many years contact with tourists, we can barely see local speaking and living in old lifestyle.
In conclusion, as discussed above, i personally disagree with the opinion that the goverment should spend more budget to the tourism industry. This us because tourism seems to have many disadvantages such as contribution to destruction of nature and culture.
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Essay evaluation report
tourism certainly benefit to many developing countries
tourism certainly benefits to many developing countries
tourism encourage people
tourism encourages people
Sentence: This us because tourism seems to have many disadvantages such as contribution to destruction of nature and culture.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a pronoun, personal, accusative
Suggestion: Refer to This and us
Sentence: To begin with, there are some people aruging that tourism certainly benefit to many developing countries in financial ways.
Error: aruging Suggestion: arguing
Sentence: To specify this, due to the construction of seaside resorts along with pubs and nightclubs the costal scenery is ruined.
Error: costal Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In conclusion, as discussed above, i personally disagree with the opinion that the goverment should spend more budget to the tourism industry.
Error: goverment Suggestion: government
flaws:
No. of Words: 245 350 //Need words more than 250. When you develop one idea, don't just put one sentence, need more sentences like this:
paragraph 1: introduction. Your ideas/opinions here.
paragraph 2: Admittedly, there are some advantages of side A. First, ... Second, ...
paragraph 3: However, still I support side B. reason 1 + why reason 1 + example for reason 1 + a small conclusion for reason 1.
paragraph 4: In addition, reason 2 + why reason 2 + example for reason 2+ a small conclusion for reason 2.
paragraph 5: conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 245 350
No. of Characters: 1307 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.956 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.335 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.624 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.963 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51020408163 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71269248929 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608163265306 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8568759871 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237450491282 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761463934547 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696085361017 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151243513696 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698910618052 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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