Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally crucial for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Goals that center around economic growth will promote people’s welfare. However, I believe setting a target for environmental sustainability is far more valuable as it prevents the climate crisis from worsening.
The increase in social welfare is the primary reason the government focuses on economic development, generating higher purchasing power. An improvement in a nation's economy usually follows a salary raise given by an employer. Thus more money means an increase in household consumption. For instance, Unilever Indonesia reported a jump in Q3 sales after the Minister of Finance announced a 5% growth in Indonesia's GDP after recovering from the Covid-19 crisis. The data showed an increase in products purchased by each household by up to one in ten, indicating higher buying ability. However, this also leads to more plastic waste as a byproduct of buying more consumer goods.
Environmental sustainability needs to be considered by the government, as most of the damages contributing to climate change come from industrial activities. The worsened climate crisis leads to further environmental destruction that threatens human’s necessities for survival. For example, China’s air quality index has worsened three times within a decade as thousands of manufacturers were built to fulfill the demand. The hazardous carbon polluted the air as coal was used to operate factories, causing the temperature rise and the limited amount of exigent. The condition occurred due to weak law enforcement towards analyzing environmental effects from manufacturers. Hence, robust law enforcement is needed being established by the authority.
In conclusion, although the improvement of the nation’s economy increases welfare, I argue that progress related to environmental sustainability is crucial in climate change prevention. If possible, creating a target combining both aspects is necessary.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...r purchasing power. An improvement in a nations economy usually follows a salary raise ...
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Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ws a salary raise given by an employer. Thus more money means an increase in househo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 24.0651302605 29% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8085106383 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23685643418 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641843971631 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8359947669 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.375 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0756440973359 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0234107542397 0.084324248473 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0286583602999 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0531606805463 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267333397389 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.84 50.2224549098 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.12 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.58 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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