Recent years have witnessed high levels of sugar in nearly all food and drink products, which is a major threat to human health. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea of increasing the prices of sugary products to discourage people to consume sugar because it can have a huge impact on low and middle-income families and eventually lead to the breakthrough of healthy alternatives.
Making sugary products more inaccessible by raising prices benefit people from low and middle socio-economic backgrounds. The reason is that the major consumers of foods and drinks containing high levels of sugar are those people and wealthy families do not eat those unhealthy foods because they have their own nutritionists to prepare for their daily diet. Hence, increasing prices is building a barrier between poor people and those products, who are struggling even in their everyday lives. As a result, they will try to choose healthy but cheap fruits which have lots of health benefits.
Moreover, making sugary products expensive also encourage researchers and scientists to develop healthy alternatives to sugar. Since companies lose their major consumers, they will definitely try all methods to get back those customers. The only solution is to make food prices accessible to them. As a consequence, big companies will invest a huge amount of money in research and development to discover healthy but inexpensive sugar alternatives. If they found them eventually, they can have a huge impact on the whole society and most diseases due to sugar will fade away over time, which is a great benefit to humankind.
In conclusion, I believe that by increasing sugary product prices, people will try to consume more healthy food and companies will try to produce healthy alternatives.
- The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004 78
- The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013 78
- The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1910 and 2010 Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key features and make any relevant comparisons 78
- Many governments think that economic progress is most important goal some people however think that other types of progress and equally important for a country 78
- In some parts of the world it s becoming increasingly popular to try to find out the history of their own family why do you think people do this Do you think it s a positive or negative development 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to even'
Suggestion: to even
... and those products, who are struggling even in their everyday lives. As a result, t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25783972125 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86944322607 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543554006969 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3703861389 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.75 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9166666667 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262510981368 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099204751883 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702114148195 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174747083041 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491403930699 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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