It is widely argued that sugary products are supposed to have a higher price to stop people from consuming them without limitation because a high level of sugar may contribute to many health issues. From my perspective, I tend to disagree with this idea. I think making sugary products more expensive is not the only and best way to solve the sugar problem.
In fact, the higher price doesn't have as much of a significant influence as some people think, and sometimes it could be negative. Firstly, the price of sugary products is not low, and there are still my poor children who can't afford to buy candies or drinks; it is unfair for them to increase the price. Secondly, sugar can offer energies to physical bodies, and it could be useful only if used appropriately, a higher price may cause bad effects on those who really need it. Finally, sugary products help to maintain a positive attitude as well. For example, when I was at university, I was always stressed during the test month, and candy, the most common sugary product, could help me get out of depression.
There are some other measures that could be taken by government to prevent people from eating too much sugary food. On the one hand, the government should make efforts to make the public aware of the health problems that sugar would bring, such as by holding health lectures in communities or schools monthly and adding warnings on the label of sugary products. On the other hand, the government has to establish strict supervision over the levels of sugar that factories put into their products. Measures like enrolling in a relative law or checking the levels of sugar inside products more often will be effective.
In conclusion, making sugary products more expensive is not an ideal solution because it may hurt others right and hard to achieve people's intended results.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...r problem. In fact, the higher price doesnt have as much of a significant influence...
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Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...nd there are still my poor children who cant afford to buy candies or drinks; it is ...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me other measures that could be taken by government to prevent people from eating...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83647798742 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49850237964 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575471698113 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4888667176 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.307692308 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3846153846 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333479986872 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113206919333 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718873776514 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201990447324 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830787244424 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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