Many museums charge for admission while others are free.Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

While money charging is the classical ritual for the museums, it is often seen that some museums change the admission rules to entirely free entry now. I strongly believe that the advantages of the admission price are absolutely not outweighing the disadvantages. 
Some supporters may think that a suitable admission price is critical as far as controlling the visitor numbers on the museums. While I partly agree with this opinion, the most important thing is that increases the attraction of the museums. A local example of this idea would be the fact that the population of the Hong Kong museums is low as well as no one interest to entry as the exhibits as well as the entry prices are not attractive for the peoples. Hence, it is vital to take out the admission price as far as improve the attraction of the museums in order to raise the population of the museums’ visitors.
Likewise, there are several reasons why I believe that the negative consequences are much more than the positive consequences of the admission charge. In Hong Kong, the history or cultural knowledge of the residents is lacked since the approach is not enough for them. Also, museums are a feasible way to expand their learning about history as well as cultural knowledge. Therefore, as long as the admission price of the museums can be abolished, the variety acknowledges of the city or others would be rose for the inhabitants or even tourists by the free participation in the museums.
In conclusion, I believe that the admission price of the museums is not a proper policy, and there are various positive effects for free entry.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, likewise, may, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1349.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88768115942 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96112484446 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496376811594 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.3970263343 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.9 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356290141213 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133549931875 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875929424706 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241838353219 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427656568465 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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