Many offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to handle this problem?
There is an increasing number of criminals re-offend(V) a crime after being released. In my opinion, there are a variety of reasons leading to this phenomenon, and to solve the problem changes should be made to the current legal system.
For one thing, there are a number of reasons contributing to the rise of re-offences. Firstly, people with a criminal record are more difficult to find a job after serving their sentences, which means they are less likely to support themselves in their later lives life. As a result, they have to commit a crime, such as pocket-picking, shoplifting, and robbery, to making a living, which perpetuates the cycle of crime. Recent statistics from the BBC, for example, show that the percentage of re-offenders has been rising over the last decades, among which nearly 90% of them are unemployed. Secondly, their about law is another reason why they commit a crime for more than once. The cost of breaking the law is to low, compared with their huge illegal profits. If a man needs to stay in prison for 3 years for smuggling drugs, it is probably he will continue to smuggle when he is free. If he has to be kept in prison for over 20 years, things may be different.
In order to deal with the root causes of repeated criminals, a series of improvements should be introduced. Firstly, instead of putting criminals directly into prison for a period of time which will reduce the chance of prisoners' reforming, alternative ways, including(such as) community services, and training them for vocational skills, can be taken to prepare prisoners for their later life. For instance, research(U) on criminals conducted by a famous university in the US shows that the proportion of repeated criminals dropped by more than 50% for those prisoners gaining vocational training when at prison. Furthermore, harsher punishments are is also an effective way to deter criminals and prevent them from re-offending.
In conclusion, lacking skills to start a career and slight punishment are the main reasons why people commit crimes again, so improvements on (in) the two aspects can be an effective way to resolve the issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, for one thing, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98333333333 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85529478922 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2927201827 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.6 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162277399201 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552212746658 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475900242084 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111787450529 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438015259127 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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