In our contemporary epoch, thanks to advancement of technology, this chance is given to our generation to benefit from a really confort lifestyle without bearing the burden of performing some tough responsibilities. While there are undoubted benefits, various negative effects stem from this too.
Almost all of us prefer to be inactive in our routine days and the result of this choice is nothing but disease.
In this article I will elaborate some of the main reasons for our tendency to this type of lifestyle and I will attempt to express some optimal solutions for addressing the current situation.
In our today era, most of the difficult and overwhelming duties are done by modern devices and robots. By progressing the effect of technology in our life, we tend to follow a sedentary lifestyle more and more.
In comparison our today's life with our previous generation, the amount of our stiff physical responsibilities are significantly reduced.
We spend several hours in our offices in front of our monitors or rely on our comfort sofa while we are at home without any desire for performing some physical activities. However there are only so many individuals who try to dedicate a specific time for exercise everyday.
Not only immerse we in numerous developed technologies but also we plunge in enormous magnitude of unhealthy food. So in the light of a combination of these two major items obesity has emerged. It is obvious that being overweight has numerous side effects on our health. The rate of Cardiovascular disease is significantly raised between fat people. Logically by augmentation of weight, people suffer from movement disorders and risk of impairment of reflexes is dramatically increased.
However, the governments could drastically decrease the speed of weight gain in each society by doing some reforms.
The prominent factor to invert this trend is educating the public. Undoubtedly by improving common knowledge about the adverse effects of sedentary lifestyle and emphasis on the advantages of exercise, the rate of inactivity is drastically diminished.
I personally believe different companies should encourage their employees to allocate a specific time to exercise in their workplace. They also could augment the participating rate by considering some promotion fees.
Obviously companies could benefit from having healthy stuff with their maximum level of energy for working.
To recapitulate, notwithstanding the phenomenon of overweighting in societies, the government and companies should encourage people to opte a more active lifestyle because never could individuals reach this aim without any supportive programs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 414.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46859903382 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11108110527 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 176.041082164 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584541062802 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 506.74238477 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1069292721 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.80952381 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.95238095238 7.06120827912 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 12.0 4.38176352705 274% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0984874912513 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303229751932 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033133545811 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0383696651033 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239095444191 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 78.4519038076 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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