In modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products for instance clothing or medicine To what extend do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

In modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing or medicine. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

Thanks to the emergence of various breakthroughs and advances in scientific area, it is widely believed people no longer need to use animals’ products such as food, medince, or even clothing. Personally, I totally approve to this point of view.
In this contemporary world, there are various alternative sources which also bring merits to people’s life just like products from animals. To begin with, scientist believe that a plant-based diet not only provides sufficient nutrients for body but also helps people to prevent from many health-related issues such as diabetes, cholesterol or blood pressure. More over, the artificial leather and high-quality synthesized fabric can be used to replace animals’s fur in clothing industry.For instance, it is not necessary to sacrifie the whole life of crocodiles for jackets or handbags. Thirdly, thanks to the development of technology, pharmacists can independently create drugs with accurate results. Instead of adapting conventional methods to research animals’ medicine, artificial one is produced via modern computer programs and better devices, which later result in safer outcome.
Moreover, depending on the products of animals heavily can also invoke a great harm to our massive ecosystem. In addition, it is widely believed that humans, species, plants and other life forms contribute to the giant ecosystem.Consequently, the more the animal-related products are created, the higher the rate of animals’ extinction is,extremely disrupting the balance of ecological system.
Taking everything into consideration, since the alternative elements can also gratify the higher demand of people in different products, it is no longer necessary to depend on animals. If this case happen, the balance of nature will be negatively damaged.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, moreover, so, third, thirdly, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7276119403 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25948373815 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65671641791 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9558680321 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.545454545 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.81818181818 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244714666939 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757188597946 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728405179935 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132823362177 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500796381075 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.25 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.72 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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