More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, car and other items. Why is this trend? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
In the modern world, it is common to see individuals desire to purchase renowned clothing, automobile and other products. There are a number of reasons behind this phenomenon and in my opinion, despite a number of benefits, this trend should be considered as a negative development.
There are two primary reasons why the tendency of buying of the latest, the most fashionable items is increasingly popular worldwide nowadays. One reason is that people tend to look at a person's appearance to judge that person, especially teenagers. For instance, youngsters love playing with those who have lots of things that are made by famous brands such as Channel, Dior, Gucci,... Others who don't have those high-fashion clothes or expensive cars are seen as lowly and old-fashioned individuals. Furthermore, money and possessions are considered to be more important than family and friends in today's consumer society. It represents a person's status and position in a large number of citizens.
According to the reasons expressed above, I believe that this trend has more downsides than advantages. Firstly, it divides the community into different classes and high-status ones are likely to criticize and oppress people in the lower classes. As a result, it will make the whole country suffer from disunity and hate, which can lead to other big problems such as demonstrations in the workforce. Secondly, renowned items will drastically change over time, therefore, more things are going to be consumed and factories have to work at full capacity to meet their needs. Because of this, carbon dioxide emissions is being releasing in a great amount, which is harmful to both human health and the environment.
In conclusion, it is clear that there are various reasons why more and more individuals are buying well-known clothing labels, cars and other products. In addition, it also has various consequences to many aspects of people's lives and their surroundings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24920127796 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90281217603 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607028753994 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.2824049489 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.533333333 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7333333333 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282291961996 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763446665722 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068009799989 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160197209377 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052939008191 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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