Both job and money is considered as an essential for the parents to survive in their lives, so they totally spend their precious time on jobs rather than to spend more time with their offsprings, due to this, their children do not easily understand the importance of values in their life which related to the society and ethical concepts.
To commence with, a large number of parents are contributing doing a race, especially to ameliorate their financial status.As, the progenitors are facing regularly the obstacles which mainly related to the inflation criteria. Eventually, they earn more money which make them able to improve the status of their offsprings. For instance, a survey was conducted by the researchers which showed, not only father but also mother was putting a lot of efforts to do work together, because they only wanted to change their earlier surroundings and make their life more easier.
However, despite of its reasons, there are numerous sobering problems arising due to the working time of parents. As, during this time, their offsprings can not get thorough insights into the definition of relationship, because they just only able to utilize their time alone, especially by using electronic gadgets such as television and mobile phones as along with enormous obstacles related to trust can be arised between the relationship of parents and children. For example, it is mostly seen that the teenagers are indulging in bad activities by using the smart phones, because they are not properly receiving the shelter of the parents.
To conclude, the progenitors are played an indispensable part in their offsprings' life. Although, it is very essential for the parents to do more work, but still they should have to abbreviate their working time, because their children's life can not be ameliorated only through money together with love of parents is also required.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ethical concepts. To commence with, a large number of parents are contributing doing a race, ...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...ly to ameliorate their financial status.As, the progenitors are facing regularly t...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ly to ameliorate their financial status.As, the progenitors are facing regularly t...
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Line 3, column 558, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...arlier surroundings and make their life more easier. However, despite of its reasons, th...
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Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... due to the working time of parents. As, during this time, their offsprings can n...
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Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s related to trust can be arised between the relationship of parents and children...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18566775244 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71380665773 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553745928339 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.2975951904 168% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.3357142553 49.4020404114 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.888888889 106.682146367 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.1111111111 20.7667163134 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265701516582 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109358006904 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735540030099 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179319215394 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585022878672 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.1190380762 154% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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