Multicultural societies in which there is a mixture of different ethnicpeoples bring more benefits than drawbacks of a country To whatextent do you agree or disagree

Lately, there has been a debate about multicultural societies, where everyone is able to spread their traditions, and have more advantages than drawbacks for a country. But there is more weight on the benefit side than the disadvantages. Within the scope of the writing, I am going to present some main ideas about why living in a multicultural community is the best choice.

To start with, people who tend to work overseas usually have brilliant intelligence. They use their maximum effort in order to get a foot in international colleges locate in popular countries such as England or the United State. When they finish studying, they have the confidence to apply to every big company that helps them sharpen their skills and increase the company's digits and economy. As the result, the whole society becomes interesting.

Another noticeable reason is that middle age people sacrifice their life for a better generation of their bloodline. It is easy to be seen that the number of Asian people residing in Western land is increasing daily. Because of foreign education, facilities are always better than in their country. The kids have chances to get into high-quality schools and exchange the culture they have been taught by their parents. That is why a mixed community is unique and crucial.

In conclusion, living in a combined area is a great opportunity but we have to choose wisely in order to have profits for ourselves.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, in conclusion, such as, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1201.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 239.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02510460251 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77152992535 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623430962343 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8699112425 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3846153846 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3846153846 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84615384615 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0883044759611 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362851704423 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547855613902 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0525059794566 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652033918469 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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