New technologies have changed the way children spend their time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?
Novel technological developments have altered how children spend their leisure time. Although this trend has some negative effects to some extent, I believe that its benefits are more significant.
On the one hand, there are a number of major impacts when children spend too much time playing with technological devices. Firstly, when children devote a large amount of their time to video games or screen time activities, this tendency would have an adverse influence on their health. As a result, they suffer from various health problems such as eye strain, short-sightedness or obesity. Additionally, more time spent on online entertainment activities means less time for other social activities. Children tend to play electronic games or browse the internet instead of hanging out with their peers. This would lead to social isolation which seriously affects their later lives.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are more significant than such disadvantages. The first reason is that, new technologies help kids enrich their knowledge and learn from a wide range of valuable skills. My young niece, for example, knows more about animals and their natural habitats by watching discovery channel on her iPad. Furthermore, hi-tech gadgets stimulate children’s creativity and imagination. A child, for instance, could learn to conduct simple experiments by watching educational programs like Minute Earth or Best of science. Finally, children have more opportunities to make friends from all over the world by using social networking sites such as Facebook, Twitter or Instagram.
In conclusion, I would argue that the appearance of new technological improvements brings more benefits than drawbacks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55133079848 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99405937862 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.661596958175 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.0684209887 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.3333333333 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281072381983 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892209277253 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086589292189 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166182511725 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724233451015 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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