New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time.
Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In the modern society, many people think that allowing children to spend plenty of time is effect on a negative way. However, in my view, it does not necessary to prohibit them from doing diverse technologies; cell phones, computers, tablets, and electronic devices. I'm going to address supportive reasons in a environmental way and socializing way.
First of all, the wide use of electronic devices makes children to educate how to reduce usage of paper. For example, an e-book reader device has a number of advantages. Downloading e-books through the advice and reading the book everywhere, anytime are the main advantage. Relatively, paper book may possible to be ruined by passing the time and do not seem portable to carry out. I watched the documentary from National Geography, they said if we have to make a box of A4, we need to cut approximately 5 thousand of trees. I was shocked the huge number of cut tree produce a box of paper. After I watched the video, I decided to buy a tablet similar usage with e-book.
Second of all, nowadays, all children have a cell phone in order to avoid of crucial crimes and make some friends. For instance, if your child is kidnapped by stranger without mobile devices. I don't want to imagine this situation, but it is possible. You can not reach out your child. Another reason is most of the parents shop because of those reasons ,so if only your child does not have mobiles, it's gonna be hard to get along with them. Your child might be seperated from their friends extremely and it caused by commiting suicide.
In conclusion, I don't think that spending their free time with new technologies is a bad behavior. It helps people socialized and preserve environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79461279461 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70493826928 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.927529853 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1111111111 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209026428692 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551915524882 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857740414544 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142579391925 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903041572819 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.