Recently, facilities such as sport center, parking area, and shopping mall should be stated in the development site plan of all new city. This idea is in line with the increase in needs of citizen for better life and economic growth of the town so that I strongly concur with this consequence.
To begin with, the majority of people living in cities have busy life which need private vehicles to support their mobility. In consequence, cities should have an adequate and proper parking area. Additionally, living a city life will lead to the high level of stress. Therefore, there must be facilities that can provide entertainment and refreshment to the people and some resource where they can maintain their physical health such as shopping malls and sport centers. A survey conducted in Surabaya said that approximately 65% of the city inhabitants spent their weekend at shopping mall to reduce their stress while 30% of them choose to play sports to rise their happiness level and maintain their physical health. This results evidently emphasizes the importance of that facilities in towns.
Regarding economic growth, build shopping centers, sports arenas, and public parks could attract more investors and increase the opportunity in earning more money for towns development. Perceptibly, shopping malls have many space that could be offered to many brand venues. The more venues that shopping centers have the more customers and transactions will take place. As a results, it provide more tax that beneficial for cities developments. Concerning sports arena, if it built with good quality, it can be used as the venue for sports events which attract visitors. The visitors then spent their money for hotels, foods, parking and tickets which also contribute to the income of the city.
In conclusion, including shopping mall, public parks, and sport centers in cities development plan will provide a lot of positive sites for the comfortable of the citizens and the city economic growth.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun space seems to be countable; consider using: 'many spaces'.
Suggestion: many spaces
...pment. Perceptibly, shopping malls have many space that could be offered to many brand ven...
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Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...rs and transactions will take place. As a results, it provide more tax that beneficial fo...
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Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...tions will take place. As a results, it provide more tax that beneficial for cities dev...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o contribute to the income of the city. In conclusion, including shopping mall, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21739130435 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65135193162 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0970321634 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238584308243 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800518510261 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875336626345 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163926544213 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518900209653 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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