Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, it is evident for people to witness celebrities' exoticism and luxury lifestyle, which outshine their hard-won achievement. Although I agree that some celebs may set a negative example for the youth, I believe plenty of other famous people act as positive models.
On the one hand, it is apparent that many people now grow popular and become successful by displaying their lavish lifestyle rather than working hard to achieve it. In fact, these celebrities often lack the talent to make a valuable contribution to society. Take Kim Kardashian as an example; While thanks to her tendency to render glamorous lifestyles and lavish dressing styles on the internet, she managed to draw millions of followers on social media and become a billionaire despite her lack of talents in acting and singing. However, young people affected by her lavish lifestyle crave to spend more money on expensive clothes and accessories that they otherwise cannot afford. Thus, this proves to be negative to the mental wellbeing of young ones as even more dire when they cannot follow that kind of materialistic lifestyle.
On the other hand, there are many other overlooked famous individuals whose accomplishments make them excellent role models for the youth. Singers, actors, football superstars, and musicians rise to stardom thanks to their endless hard-working days and the ability to harness their talents for good causes. Such people never stop believing in the value of hard work and commitment to contribute to their homelands and people in need one day. They render great effort, determination, and ambition, which is a prerequisite for anyone who wants to become a successful and decent citizen. An example is the greatest football player Cristiano Ronaldo, who successfully worked out of poverty at 18 and became the most successful footballer, primarily thanks to his long year of practice and hard work. This self-made celebrity can motivate young ones to discover and develop their talents through application and perseverance.
In conclusion, it is a matter of personal preference to choose whatever kind of celebrities to follow. Though famous but faultily lavish people in today's world are inevitable, many decent and diligent stars are worth looking up to for young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2967032967 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82148608392 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598901098901 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8248198508 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.533333333 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2666666667 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262716126854 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852344602881 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529432495052 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161486871713 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509560306028 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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