Nowadays, families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this.
Why is this happening?
Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?
Family members used to be intimate with each other in the past. However, individuals now seem to increasingly isolate from their family. In my opinion, this phenomenon happens under certain social backdrop. And the curse brought by this trend outweighs its blessing.
The main reason for the isolation from family is the changes in lifestyles. First, the prevalence of smartphones has dramatically increased people’s screen time. Instead of talking to family in person, people prefer to watch short videos and posts via social media. That leads to a drop of family quality time as a result. Another reason is that people now tend to live by their own. Unlike families in past whose members were living together in a big house, people nowadays live in a loft or small house. Therefore, they can hardly see their families on a daily basis, which also results in less intimacy among families.
Though being independent from family may have some advantages, I personally think that the disadvantage is more vital. Individuals who are less bounded to their family may enjoy more private space, and they might be free from some boundaries. However, humans are social creatures who always crave for accompany and connection. Without the sense of security provided by the close family tie, people may suffer from loneliness and isolation, which would eventually amount to mental health issues. In modern society, psychological problems have become increasingly severe. It is the high time to reconsider individuals’ relationship with their family.
In conclusion, modern lifestyles have changed how people connect with their family. Considering the mental health concerns, the drawback of this phenomenon outweighs its advantage. It is better for people to rethink their relationship with their family.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37323943662 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75795723489 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605633802817 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4656148666 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.3 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241577672087 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691726267806 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637678413109 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152913718387 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662605118035 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.27 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37323943662 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75795723489 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605633802817 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4656148666 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.3 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241577672087 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691726267806 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637678413109 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152913718387 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662605118035 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.27 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.