Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centres provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Working parents have separate views about who should look after their offspring. While some argue that grandparents can offer better care. I believe that it is superior for children to be taken care of by childcare organizations.
On the one hand, the idea of opting for grandparents is attractive for numerous reasons. Firstly, grandparents have accumulated years of experience and wisdom in raising children, particularly our parents. Hence, they would have numerous effective folk therapies about healing coughs or hiccups. Moreover, it is true to assert that grandparents always are conditionally loving their children, which childcare organization cannot practice. To illustrate, grandparents indeed satisfy mostly their children's demands ranging from purchasing snacks, candies or clothes to letting them play video games adequately. Furthermore, the fact that children are looked after by grandparents would bridge the generation gap, culminating in children more hanging on to grandparents.
On the other hand, there are a myriad of reasons why I believe childcare organizations would be the best choice to be responsible for children's upbringing. Firstly, childcare centers with the top-notch facilities, particularly surveillance camera systems would ensure the security of children. Moreover, children would be taken care of in the best condition by well-trained staff who are experienced and well-equipped in terms of babysitting. Following that, childcare centers indeed serve as a critical hub for children to foster their social skills as well as friendships building through offering them opportunities to interact with their peers. For example, my younger sister is likely to be self-reliant since she has engaged in the school setting, ranging from eating, drinking to practicing personal hygiene herself. It seems that children would be comprehensively developed when they are looked after by childcare organizations within a high-qualified environment.
In conclusion, I believe that working parents should consider childcare organizations for nurturing their offspring, rather than grandparents, who easily make children dependent.
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- Nowadays many families have both parents working Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children while others think childcare centres provide the best care Discuss both views and give your own opinion 84
- Nowadays many families have both parents working Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children while others think childcare centers provide the best care Discuss both views and give your own opinion 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... who should look after their offspring. While some argue that grandparents can offer ...
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Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...true to assert that grandparents always are conditionally loving their children, which childcare organiz...
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Line 3, column 769, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ildren more hanging on to grandparents. On the other hand, there are a myriad of...
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
... On the other hand, there are a myriad of reasons why I believe childcare orga...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, look, moreover, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.9358974359 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23358520949 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596153846154 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7152842923 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.75 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226780077216 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819608566918 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551137301158 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171818945767 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819817939754 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.17 12.4159519038 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.