Nowadays many people become popular by being featured online or appearing on TV is it a positive or negative trend in your society Give reasons for your answer and include example from experience

Technology plays a crucial role in every individual’s life. In this techno savvy era, personages use technology to become famous such as internet and a television. According to my perspective, it has a positive effects on environment. In this essay, I will elaborate the above notion with relevant instances from my own knowledge.

First and foremost, nowadays lot of masses use internet to become a popular. With the help of this, people showcase their talent on television or on internet; for instance, I saw a video on Facebook which was uploaded by my friend. Indeed, she was quite good at dance from school. Daily she was upload her video of dance on Facebook, Youtube or on Instagram. In this way, she become famous on internet as a dancer. Afterwards, she get job opportunity from one of the director as a dance in a movie. In addition, many masses want to do the same thing what she has done. Therefore, people want to indulge themselves in a extra cri-cullam activities.

Secondly, in this competitive era, all people want successful in their lives; however, due to higher competition and high fees people are not able to showcase their talent. Thus, people choose television or internet to showcase their talent; for example, India got talent is a platform where masses can show their talent. Many people get chance to work with celebrities. Hence, people are able to fulfil their desires and they swarm enough money for their families and for themselves.

In conclusion, it can be said that being popular on internet or appearing on Television has a poisition influence society. Society also want to indulge themselves in a same field.

Votes
Average: 3 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: gets
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1383.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97482014388 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8523002448 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568345323741 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4449949145 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8333333333 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4444444444 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143497030092 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462166008287 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316898877423 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086750653987 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274024547012 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.0946893788 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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