While some people state that people in some nations are encouraged to purchase some products, which is beneficial for economy, others claim that it imposes detrimental effects on the society. This essay agrees that excessive purchases set negative examples on society.
On the one hand, some people argue that the increasing consumption of goods could benefit the economy. Firstly, they believe that purchasing more goods can raise the demand for more products, which improve the productivity, employment opportunities and incomes. Consequently, there will be increasing in GDP. Furthermore, encouraging people to purchase can provide a sense of consumers’ fulfillment. Specifically, people can purchase as many as they desire. Therefore, purchasing behavior can increase happiness level and people would sense that they are not controlled by consumption.
On the other hand, I side with those who against buying more products brings benefits to economy. To begin with, overconsumption habits impact on personal savings. To be more specific, people have less money savings to prepare for urgent situations. For example, there are a numerous people in Sydney, who get stuck in financial problems since they spent most of their incomes to purchase excessively before unprecedented epidemic. Moreover, factories have to produce more products to meet the rising demand, which result in pollution, emissions and land-use. Thus, buying more products damage greatly to the environment.
In conclusion, the encouragement to buy more goods can enhance the economy and bring happiness to individuals. But it impacts on people’s finance and contribute significantly to pollution.
- Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree 83
- It is impossible to help all people in the world so governments should only focus on people in their own countries To what extent do you agree or disagree 61
- The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles 61
- As countries develop people tend to buy more and more cars Do you thing the advantages for the individual outweigh the disadvantages for the environment 78
- Many children today find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school What could you think are the main causes What are the possible solutions 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...rchases set negative examples on society . On the one hand, some people argue t...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1434.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.736 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06537913823 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.099537928 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.625 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.625 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.375 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28311087518 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888464121191 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660836101562 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175003030931 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416266104558 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.