Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing ( for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening).
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In today's world, technology has influenced almost every aspect of our lives. In the 21st century, digital technologies can facilitate shopping, working and education. However, the technologies of today can easily monitor our everyday activities or analyze an individual's private conversations. While some people believe that monitoring activities are critical to ensure our security, others contend that these interferences in our everyday lives are unnecessary.
Administrations around the world are responsible for the safety of their citizens. One important responsibility is safe guarding people from crime. Perhaps one of the most effective ways to ensure that criminal behavior is minimized is through surveillance. Closed Circuit Television (CCTV) can minimize crime by providing a visual record of any illegal activity. For example, retail outlets closely monitor the movements of shoppers. If they detect anything suspicious, security may take action to prevent theft. This is a significant deterrent to a would be thief and helps to prevent crime.
However, surveillance cameras have become ubiquitous in many of our cities. London is a good case in point. In this city, there are over 400,000 CCTV cameras covering almost every aspect of a Londoner's daily life. It is true that the visuals from these cameras have been used to successfully prosecute criminals, but many people believe this is an invasion of their privacy. Further to this, mobile telephone conversations, text messaging and email can also be monitored and recorded by corporations and governments.
To conclude, administrations are quick to point towards the advantages of continuing the expansion of surveillance technologies. They believe that these technologies are essential for ensuring public safety. In my opinion, there are situations where CCTV is a useful security tool although an individual's privacy must also be respected.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 257, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...itor our everyday activities or analyze an individuals private conversations. While some peopl...
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a (Londoners)' or simply 'Londoners'?
Suggestion: a (Londoners); Londoners
...cameras covering almost every aspect of a Londoners daily life. It is true that the visuals...
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Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...e this is an invasion of their privacy. Further to this, mobile telephone conversations...
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Line 7, column 294, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...V is a useful security tool although an individuals privacy must also be respected.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, while, for example, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67013888889 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13982402184 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2365892624 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9473684211 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1578947368 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216021287912 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565965482994 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409185361693 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119969366203 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319461673425 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.87 50.2224549098 61% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.01 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.