'The older you get, life becomes more difficult.' Discuss.

Getting older is a stage of life, and everyone passes through it.
With age, they acquire huge knowledge, Experience etc but with that they also become a part of a system where they have to live according to that. With technological growth and generation shift their choices got limited, as they can't go parallel.
With time their body and cells began to give up their support and they become weak mentally and physically.
The old people lost their friends too, so very few people are left, with whom they can share things, have fun and even get emotional support(Everyone needs emotional support no matter how older they are).
Over certain age they are unable to stand on their feet, at that stage, they are totally dependent on their family.
They also suffer from several deseased, which also account for making their life hell.
Older people are supposed to be diamond because the kind of information and experience they have helped us in our success.
We need to presearve them, as we are an advance version of theirs.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hift their choices got limited, as they cant go parallel. With time their body and ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...got limited, as they cant go parallel. With time their body and cells began to give...
^^^^
Line 6, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lso account for making their life hell. Older people are supposed to be diamond ...
^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'kind of']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.192893401015 0.247107183377 78% => OK
Verbs: 0.187817258883 0.155533422707 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0862944162437 0.0946595960268 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0507614213198 0.0501214627716 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.121827411168 0.0437548338989 278% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.10152284264 0.122226691241 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0406091370558 0.0403226058552 101% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.37876590759 2.80594681477 85% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0304568527919 0.0326793684256 93% => OK
Particles: 0.00507614213198 0.00163938923432 310% => OK
Determiners: 0.0507614213198 0.0861772015684 59% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00507614213198 0.021408717616 24% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0203045685279 0.011925033212 170% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1025.0 1933.35771543 53% => OK
No of words: 177.0 316.048096192 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.79096045198 6.12580529183 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 4.20517956788 87% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.293785310734 0.374742101984 78% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.214689265537 0.28420135186 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.112994350282 0.203846283523 55% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0847457627119 0.137316102897 62% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37876590759 2.80594681477 85% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 176.037074148 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.677966101695 0.56093040696 121% => OK
Word variations: 71.4928448406 60.7387585426 118% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0891783567 56% => OK
Sentence length: 19.6666666667 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.221608344 49.517814964 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.888888889 127.492653851 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.814263465372 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38877755511 182% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 41.1355932203 49.1944974215 84% => OK
Elegance: 0.929577464789 1.69124875643 55% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0543786622328 0.332605444948 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0911392434952 0.102741220458 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0498940429281 0.0668466124924 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.928641710358 0.534860350844 174% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145010884477 0.148594505496 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0292692898604 0.134430193775 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035311021603 0.0742795772207 48% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.123261047928 0.324371583561 38% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0751159702737 0.0638462369009 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.032927951093 0.228012699653 14% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358085822024 0.058150111329 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.68436873747 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.5751503006 78% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 6.0 10.4468937876 57% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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