One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantage of this development outweighs the disadvantages?
It is argued that the improvement in medical care is contributing to longer life expectancies. From my perspective, the advantages of this trend will outweigh the disadvantages.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why longer life expectancy is a disadvantage. Firstly, most of the elderly have a lot of diseases such as heart attack or stroke so if there are a lot of elderly in the society, the government is required to build more healthcare facilities and health care, workers. This will impact the country's finances because the government has to spend a large amount of money on the healthcare facilities and employees who work there. Secondly, the government also has to pay pensions for the elderly, this will greatly affect the country's finances and funds.
On the other hand, I think that the benefits will get outweigh the drawbacks. To begin with, the elderly can support their family a lot. For example, they can help the family by looking after the baby, or they can support the household for the family when the family is busy with work. Furthermore, the elderly can teach children about their country’s culture or play with them. This will help children relax and reduce stress after a hard school day. In addition, elderly people can also help young people a lot in certain areas because they have more experience than young people.
In conclusion, although longer life expectancy has some disadvantages, I believe that this trend still has more benefits than drawbacks.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1146.0 1615.20841683 71% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04845814978 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81199472401 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559471365639 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 346.5 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4131497109 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6666666667 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180892348098 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778719602049 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821500578232 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141106870306 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933625347116 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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