One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The life span of people are getting longer and the quality of life is improving. This is believed to be as a result of better medical care with improved technology. In my perspective, the advantages of this development outweighs the disadvantages and this shall be discussed in this essay.
On the one hand, improved medical care is improving the quality of life of people which as a result increases their life expectancy. Firstly, people are living longer to spend more time with their families. As it can be seen in Asian and African countries, older people live under the same roof as the younger generations. This gives the young people the opportunity to learn more and gain experience from these old people. There is a saying which says experience is the best teacher. Moreover, people prefer to learn from others mistakes rather than make one themselves. Also, this is an opportunity to learn about history of a place. For example, if the old people lived during the war time, the youngsters have the chance to hear undiluted stories from veterans which could have a positive impact on the lives. Secondly, the grandparents will be able to look after the young children while their parents go out to work. The money saved from this can be channelled towards something that might benefit the whole family. For example, it could be used to pay towards leisure activities for the children such as swimming classes or dancing classes. It can likewise be used to pay towards hospital bills for the grandparents if the need arise without having to get a loan to pay for these bills which could further put a financial constraints on the parents.
On the other hand, longer life expectancy as a result of improved medical care also has it down sides. To begin with, using Britain as an example, it has been on the news on how stretched the NHS has been in recents years due to funding and overflowing number of patients that needs medical services. This is because there is a large number of elderly patients who needs medical intervention especially in winter months and sometimes during hotter months. They are living longer and as a result of the improved medical care and therefore taking up all the space in the hospital and giving the younger people little chance to enjoy this medical care. Furthermore, there are not enough funding for social services to take up these elders when they are dicharged from the hospital so they will end up staying in the hospital for longer and putting more strain on the hospital services.
In conclusion, As I have discussed both sides of the argument, I am of the opinion that the advantages of improved medical care outweighs the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, likewise, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 463.0 315.596192385 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82937365011 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60549115721 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477321814255 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3375159102 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.476190476 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90476190476 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290954284433 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914057504475 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730939598387 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19551117937 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508375960262 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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